First Glance

4 thoughts on “First Glance”

  1. Ah, I DID read yours. And it is perfect. 🙂 If I had the time, I’d give these beautiful lines the same attention I gave to “On Autumn,” but unfortunately, I only choose one poem per…whatever…to deconstruct. However, I will say that your imagery brings this small, sacred “moment” to life, with color, shadow, and the sensual experience of the wonderful last line: “Stolen lips open.” Fantastic.

    For some reason, the word “lips” (well, okay for a lot of obvious reasons!) is a very tactile, sensual word: when I write “sensual,” I don’t mean “sexual.” I mean the senses, the very basic human sense of “softness” which, for most human beings, is a sought-after sensation.

    “Stolen” is reminiscent of the phrase “stolen kiss,” and the juxtaposition of that with the first line, all but INVITING the kiss with a bold stare, ah, but then the “kiru,” the cutting, second line, the subject transforms from bold to demure, and then the whole last line…the essence of the conflict of forbidden, or perhaps passion-fueled desire…

    Well, what can I say? It’s a breathtaking, sensually vibrant piece. Thank you for sharing it with us!

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    1. Oh my goodness, J.A. How generous of you! And superbly deconstructed!! That was the moment I was trying to capture but I changed the sexes to protect the innocent! Teehee!!
      Your eloquent and gifted at interpreting poetry. I feel blessed that you took the time to do this. Just delighted!! Thank you, dear!! 💗

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Published by Jordy

I live and write in Fallbrook, CA, North County San Diego. I have followed an esoteric path since my teenage years, first practicing Carlos Castaneda and the Teachings of Don Juan, and then studying Gnostic Mysticism. Truly I am an eclectic mystic and am of the opinion that one must follow their heart as all paths with Love lead to where you are. Passionate about exploring different themes and modes of writing; I write poetry, prose, short stories and just started working on a novel. It is Sci Fi, and blends Time, realms, worlds, and human, alien and galactic consciousness. I hope you explore the site and enjoy the various threads and streamings. Thank you, Jordy